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Saturday, 8 July 2017

Winter Learning Journey - Day 5 Activity 1

For this activity I have to pretend that I got lost in a forest all by myself. I have to write a short story (8-10 sentences) about what might happen next.

It was a beautiful day with the sun shining bright. I was enjoying the wonderful view of the beautiful forest when I realized that I have wandered off by myself. Desperately trying to find help. I started to call out. I was shouting as loud as a lions roar. Only having a bottle of water and an apple, it will be really hard to find some food and water. I couldn't go much further so I decided to have a nap. An hour later I was woken up from a strong noise not far away. I got up to find out what it was. It was the rest of my group looking for me and that was my most happiest moment of my life.
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12 comments:

  1. Sa Kae9 July 2017 at 08:12

    Hi AJ, I really like how you write your story and it is interesting for me to read. I really enjoyed reading you story. Keep up the great work! AJ

    Sa Kae

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  2. Zahra9 July 2017 at 10:32

    Hi AJ,
    I really like your short story about getting lost in the forest all by yourself. I liked how you used different type of punctuation.
    - Zahra

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  3. Ofa10 July 2017 at 11:42

    Hi AJ,
    Your short story sound really entertaining and amazing. The thing I really like is the powerful words you use. I really like the ending of the story!

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  5. Unknown10 July 2017 at 12:14

    Hi AJ!

    I have noticed that you have been really involved in the Winter Learning Journey which is great to see. Thank you for your comments on your peers blogs too, they are always helpful!

    My favourite part of your story is the simile you used - "I was shouting as loud as a lions roar." When I read this, it painted a picture in my head of someone being lost in a forest and roaring for help. It shows your sense of desperation to be found again!

    Thank you Sa Kae, Zahra and Ofa for your kind words to AJ. I'm sure he will find them very helpful and encouraging as he continues in his activities. It's great to see your positive contribution to your peers work. Keep it up!

    I look forward to reading more of your blog AJ as you work on completing the activities. Well done on your blogging so far!

    Nicky :)

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  6. daniel10 July 2017 at 14:00

    Hello AJ
    What a great story! I really like your story. It has similes, adjectives and proper punctuation. There's only one tiny mistake though. You wrote of by myself - it's supposed to be off by myself. Keep up the awesome work!
    Daniel

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    1. aminiasi12 July 2017 at 16:08

      Thanks Daniel for pointing that out. I will fix the mistake.

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  7. Mele10 July 2017 at 14:36

    Hello AJ,
    I have read through your short story and it sounds brilliant. It has one of the figurative language which is a simile. It's really sensitive but you need to proof check before publishing.
    Great work.

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  8. Sakina11 July 2017 at 17:49

    Hi AJ,
    Your short story is amazing. I like how you used a simile. The sentence I like is An hour later I was woken up from a strange noise not far away.
    Amazing Work.

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  9. Ohhsen13 July 2017 at 20:18

    Hi AJ. I really like your story. It paints a really clear picture in my head of what is happening. Great blogpost. Keep up the great work.

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  10. Florence15 July 2017 at 12:26

    Hi AJ,
    Your Story was brilliant because you should the reader where you were and What that place looked like
    Keep Up The Great Work - Florence

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  11. Eric19 July 2017 at 11:55

    Hi AJ,
    Your story was amazing. I like that you have put punctuation in your story it makes it great. Well Done!
    Eric

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